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You fail at haikus
Follow the correct format
Fire Grant Brissey.
Posted by BadPoetsSociety on December 11, 2011 at 10:22 AM · Report this
Grant Brissey, Emeritus 2
Hi mom!
Posted by Grant Brissey, Emeritus http://www.grantropolis.com/ on December 11, 2011 at 11:14 AM · Report this
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Yo, what kinda pizza wasn't it?
Posted by Mine Wouldn't Have Been BBQ Chicken on December 11, 2011 at 4:28 PM · Report this
Grant Brissey, Emeritus 4
@3: I like all pizza everywhere all the time.
Posted by Grant Brissey, Emeritus http://www.grantropolis.com/ on December 11, 2011 at 7:50 PM · Report this
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No mention of the season.
Posted by robotslave on December 12, 2011 at 10:18 AM · Report this
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You're going to get a taint-punch for saying that "fire" has only one syllable. Yes yes, the dictionary says so, but the dictionary is also WRONG. (how the balls does one use italics around here?) How the shit do you say "fire" without it being two syllables? "Furr?" "Far?" One has to sound like they're from Quilcene to pronounce it with only one syllable. Fy-er. Period.
Posted by Faber on December 12, 2011 at 10:44 AM · Report this
Danger 7
@4 You should look into pizza on a bagel...
Posted by Danger on December 12, 2011 at 10:53 AM · Report this
Camembert 8
Haiku isn't about the syllables. The masters of haiku like Bashō were never entirely strict about having 17 syllables and anyway the concept of syllables in Japanese ("on") aren't really the same as syllables in English. What is most important in haiku is kigo, a word that implies the season, and kereji, a word that allows the reader to contemplate a parallel or contrast.

So something like:
Loud trucks in the rain / I'm wide awake and sober / no pizza in the house
might be better, if you take rain as representing autumn, and the idea of a sober man desiring pizza to be the kereji.

RH Blyth wrote the best books in English about haiku and Chinese/Japanese/Korean literature in general, including a fantastic history of haiku that serves as a great introduction to the form. Most of it is I think sadly out of print. But there is a Penguin Classics edition of Bashō's Narrow Road To The Deep North with a brilliant introduction by Noboyuki Yuasa.
Posted by Camembert on December 12, 2011 at 11:32 AM · Report this
seandr 9
Haikus are garbage compared to limericks.
Posted by seandr on December 12, 2011 at 12:06 PM · Report this

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