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You should probably sit back for a moment and ask yourself what differentiates your website from all the otherâŚsexually-oriented websites out there, too. You need to be offering something really interesting if people are going to come and read your stuff; at the moment, your writing style ain't it.
I'm busy, too many words.
However, I'm a purple prose, letters to penthouse kind of girl myself, so I am not the target audience. Moving along.
You also need to revamp the basic WordPress layout so you're homepage is more engaging. WordPress doesn't need to be unprofessional and disorganized looking. The American Foundation for Equal Rights built their whole website (www.afer.org) in WordPress. Get some help with that from someone--and if you don't have resources for that consider what you're value prospect is (why am I supposed to come here?) supposed to be and why you're writing celebrities for their feedback.
Also, no more rants please. You need to learn to write for the internet. People will only stay on your page for about 45 seconds. Everything should be in short, meaningful pieces. When it comes to "About Us" statements, I have to know exactly what and who you are and what you're doing in the first two sentences, which should be their own paragraph.
You also need more pictures of naked people!
Do you remember them telling you in High School, "Don't tell, show"? Rather than an indigestible wad of text telling us what you're doing, do some of it.
Give me some substance to read and I'll consider giving feedback. I'm not interested in evaluating hype.
The American Heritage Dictionary define this as:
n.
Acceptance of or resignation to the prospect of defeat.
Your letter to Dan and the disclaimer on your blog were nice embodiments of defeatism.
My advice: Be excited about your writing and your ideas and other people will be excited as well. Not a single person will want to read your blog if you don't believe in it yourself.
I'D LOVE TO CALL YOU A CUNT!
BUT YOU LACK BOTH THE DEPTH AND WARMTH!!!
OK, all the stories sound like they were written by the same person, using distractingly florid language and weird euphemisms, euphemisms, by the way, that obstruct understanding rather than adding humor or interest. Plus, the stories are third-person AND sound vaguely made-up, an uninteresting combination, there. And, sorry, the anecdotes are sort of universal, childish AND boring, all at the same time. I can't relate to these people without something interesting happening, or maybe more details (like what is happening with their bodies or their feelings, exactly). Perhaps a realistic first-person perspective would add some brief tension and real-life honesty.
For example, if your first girlfriend laughed at you once, and you called her to brag when sex went right with your next girlfriend (let me just say: "RUDE"), and she was HAPPY for you (like, being nice) what is the insight? Where's the sexiness? What is the point of the story?
I also thought the story about the sports-cream vs lube was BS
The homepage's wall of text needs to be more concise, and with a link to the first story.
I enjoyed the stories. I'd agree that they're somewhat Reader's Digest but that's no bad thing in my book.
The space vulvas are amusing.
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Fractal
Moving on. Don't anticipate my mood changing.
If it's a broad survey of human sexuality, then the anecdotes need to be in first person, and a little less emphasis put on editing. We're talking about sex here.
Finally, if you are wondering why no one has been inspired to comment on your stories, it's because they are impersonal, trite, and boring. Sex it up a little, and don't pretend to be gender neutral, you're not.
And I don't understand people who say "it's not a site, it's a blog." A blog is a site.
I am still trying to learn the tools for the blog as well as blogging. The material provided was mostly autobiographical, but the way, but apparently I'm supposed to say "I" and "me" a lot more to make that obvious. I'm still confused about the "you're not being gender neutral" remarks. Yes, I do have a mostly male perspective, but I try to be a little more rounded. Cest la vie.
I am still trying to learn the tools for the blog as well as blogging. The material provided was mostly autobiographical, but the way, but apparently I'm supposed to say "I" and "me" a lot more to make that obvious. I'm still confused about the "you're not being gender neutral" remarks. Yes, I do have a mostly male perspective, but I try to be a little more rounded. Cest la vie.